Friday, August 9, 2013

Friday Original Poem

One thing that I love about poetry therapy is how not only am I exploring different emotions and experiences but I'm doing in way I have never done before. I'm trying to write in forms which is new for me. I've always written poetry and while I have studied forms never thought it'd be for me.But I am working on it.

After reading a gorgeous pantoum poem by Patricia Fargnoli, I thought I'd give it a try.

Here's the basic outline for how a pantoum should be written:

line A
line B
line C
line D

line B (repeated)
line E
line D (repeated)
line F

line E (repeated)
line G
line F (repeated)
line H

line Y
line C (repeated)
line Z
line A (repeated)

Here's is the one I wrote for my daughter:

For Violet

The kingfisher rattled and led
past sandstone crannies and crooks
past birch on a cliff
spoke in our language.

Past sandstone crannies and crooks
I pulled the blue kayak
spoke in our language
I told you all is well.

I pulled the blue kayak
You glided on clear water
I told you all is well
let the waves roll under you.

You glided on clear water
past birch on a cliff
let the waves roll under you
the kingfisher rattled and led.


14 comments:

  1. This is lovely. Thank you.

    I'm going to send the link to one of my poetry friends.

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    1. Thanks, Ann! And have a happy birthday!

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  2. Great explanation of the form and lovely poem, Gina! I can hear your kingfisher and see you and your daughter gliding through this majestic scene.

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  3. Gina, you are such a great person/poet/learner! Let's just keep learning, always, eh? I LOVE your poem. Made me feel like I was right there on the water with you two. Did you share it with Violet? Maybe she'd like to have it as a version for herself, too. You could help her change all the pronouns around, from I to You from You to I... Maybe too complicated, or maybe an advanced grammar lesson? Maybe I am too pushy, after all... ;)

    Love You All!
    Nessa

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    1. Thank you, Nessa! This poem wouldn't exist without your guidance.

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  4. Oops, some of the "you"s would be "me"s. Maybe indeed too complex. I just like to have fun!

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    1. I love your ideas and I playing around!

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  5. It's not an easy kind of poem to write. I love that you are always willing to accept a new challenge. It has made you the strong person you are.

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  6. Wonderful! I love the repeating lines.

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  7. The repeating lines give this such a wonderful quality- great poem. I'm sure your daughter loved it.

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    1. I was so intimidated by the form at first but I love the end result. Thank you!

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